Fanfic
After today I have read several fanfictions that are urgently improved, here my opinion on what is not at all in fanfictions.
first Too many spelling errors
I really wonder some people, if that ever stopped anyone who said that now almost every word processor has an automatic spell checker. Of course, it also happens sometimes that one mistake, but at some point it's just too much.
second Wrong "Terms"
I mean specifically that someone writes a fanfic about a certain topic and then the corresponding terms from the fans false writing or completely incorrect use.
spelling mistakes are just annoying, but completely false ideas usually lead to comprehension problems. The spiritual pressure of Bleach is not "Reiraku" but "Reiatsu. But if the former stands there, then sometimes the whole sentence incomprehensible.
course there are terms which are not quite unique, such as the spelling of names Pains in Naruto. Whether this is really from the English word, you can now times (as far as I know) say, so I do not see it so close.
basic rule: anyone who is not safe if you look previously ! Here to help Google and Wikipedia and Naruto also Narutopedia .
third Half or "broken" sentences
With my broken I here that are either missing words or to second by the sentence does not understand. It annoys the amazing reading, if you read a sentence twice in order to understand it at all. The
can handle easily, simply by again just reads the words written about or be a beta reader investigated.
4th Colloquial language, where it does not belong
In direct speech, etc. I have absolutely nothing against it, but if you write in a part of the FIC as narrator, one should also use written language. Reads and sounds better in improving ways.
5th Present instead of past
As they say usually only things that have happened, to use for stories of the past. Of course, not for direct speech, etc., but for everything you write as narrator.
6th Too many short sentences
This is my opinion after reading just too choppy and disturbs so that the flow of reading. Of course I realize that this may well be a stylistic device, but it still bothers
7th Plate Chatraktere
For a story will be most interesting if the characters have depth . Therefore, I find it terrible when the action is simply told without explaining why the person does something. Nobody's just something wrong, but the people have a reason for their actions . (Maybe out of psychopaths who are mentally impaired.) The best example is Gaara from Naruto, who only wants to kill them all because him want to kill everyone and then his fight with Naruto realizes that he is not alone and come to their senses.
8th cause rapid sequence of actions
between the individual events must sometimes a break . In real life happens not through something eventually, so it is important to act in accordance with expand. Except, of course, has one little story from the start, that's something different. ^ - ^
(for example well-developed plot : balance example little action : 13)
9th Framed Japanese
If you can not the language, you have to ask or google it. But what I had read there already for things in Japanese, would in part have been really easy to fix. This is in the wrong order no as well as the incorrect use of adjectives.
now before someone is upset and thinks that I should not do such a know-all and would have no idea, I want to stress again that this is my opinion . Also, I have determined in my previous life as the 1000 books to read Deshalb und weiß, wie man eine Geschichte aufbauen muss für Fehler und was man nicht machen sollte und ich studiere Japanologie.
Thursday, December 31, 2009
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Short Reviews II (movies)
belongings in recent weeks - for my circumstances - quite a lot of movies watched. On the one hand again any part of the SAW series and containing the new part, SAW VI and then I finally overcome me and me the three Resident Evil films done.
SAW I is so labeled by many as by far the best or even like to be the only good Saw film, the best of it anyway, but by far? He is damn good, that is clear, but grad loses the end, as in all parts of this series or general films with Game Changer at the end rather at Impact. Nevertheless, a great start of a new horror series.
4.5 / 5
SAW II is from the beginning raised differently than the first part, but that is purely managed by the plot ago imo. Unfortunately weaken the characters (in the house) a little bit. Therefore, this part contains the syringe pit the sickest event for me, but when that was not enough to run the whole thing with me even worse. Anyway it notes the importance of Amanda for the SAW series is and how awesome is Jigsaw.
4 / 5
SAW III - appear for the first time that the conscience traps. The main "victim" must decide in this case are whether another person should live or die. This kind of case I find rather boring, probably because the other people I would not care [about this: The Button (The Box spoof) ]. This is the back story quite nice and Amanda gets more depth. Furthermore, another important character is introduced. Nevertheless, imo, the first low point of the SAW series.
2.5 / 5
SAW IV - We meet two old friends again - rig which is placed by Jigsaw to promote to various people in Jigsaw traps so he can reach Eric Matthews. From that part is quite complicated in the series, but this is a fairly good twist and a hammer final. Furthermore, it is so successful the "second trilogy" and started a new cycle, for SAW IV to know the reason, many parallels to the first part.
4 / 5
SAW V - This time again have several people work together to escape from the traps (again parallel to the second part of the "first trilogy). One such person is the wonderful Julie Benz. Otherwise the story is more in focus so we get to Jigsaw's ex-wife Jill to know and learn more about Hoffman. Incidentally, the last scene is imo one of the best ends of the series.
3.5 / 5
SAW VI - The end of the second Trilogy thus conscience are once again falling on the plan, as I said I do not like them. However, they are better than their predecessors from SAW III. Otherwise, again expanded the story and we learn even more about Jill and Hoffman. There are (at least not within the SAW series within the movie), a right stuck surprising end and a reunion with Bear Trap in the case of Amanda in SAW I. Basically a good introduction to SAW VII, which is to bear the name and Endgame [again] to be the last part of the saga of Jigsaw. can if you are into the series they certainly pack on it anywhere, 0.5 points:
3 / 5
SAW conclusion. As for me when second run of the series has inspired especially the inner logic and the like end of the second trilogy, which is itself a bit more tributes. Basically reach into every part of more and more Sprockets logically into one another. I am fascinated by the series and they believe that the best horror series that did so far and am looking forward to any further part.
Resident Evil - Well with a few names / Licker name and the film actually has nothing to do with little Resident Evil. Here, the Licker is animated in the rest terrible. Otherwise, no voltage produced, still tells a good story and it just does not end satisfactorily. The film could also be called virus-XY. Well at least with Milla Jovovich a great dress.
fifth
Residen Evil: Apocalypse - Significantly higher Resi-feeling, but also generally much more entertaining. Jill Valentine and Nemesis was pretty good reception is great. There is also much more action than the first part, but also partly to excessive action scenes, but this is due to strange forces. Nevertheless, one would have the whole thing a bit less partying can. Overall a very entertaining movie which you look at quite can.
3 / 5
Resident Evil: Extinction - desert setting, birds, miscast and a terrible haircut to my mind spontaneously when I think back. The Resi-feeling is screwed down again for basically as in the first part only have names and have nothing to do with zombies Resident Evil. Even though I like them, but Ali Larter as Claire Redfield is an absolute wrong choice. Milla looks terrible and the plot is fairly unimportant to scarce.
1.5 / 5
Resident Evil-The Bottom Line: The second one can look at .. even as a Resident Evil fan, the other two are more of an insult to the name. What I really find the lack of reference to the games notice is negative, the very bumpy transition from film to film. They seem as if you had really no idea yet what happens in the next part.
belongings in recent weeks - for my circumstances - quite a lot of movies watched. On the one hand again any part of the SAW series and containing the new part, SAW VI and then I finally overcome me and me the three Resident Evil films done.
SAW I is so labeled by many as by far the best or even like to be the only good Saw film, the best of it anyway, but by far? He is damn good, that is clear, but grad loses the end, as in all parts of this series or general films with Game Changer at the end rather at Impact. Nevertheless, a great start of a new horror series.
4.5 / 5
SAW II is from the beginning raised differently than the first part, but that is purely managed by the plot ago imo. Unfortunately weaken the characters (in the house) a little bit. Therefore, this part contains the syringe pit the sickest event for me, but when that was not enough to run the whole thing with me even worse. Anyway it notes the importance of Amanda for the SAW series is and how awesome is Jigsaw.
4 / 5
SAW III - appear for the first time that the conscience traps. The main "victim" must decide in this case are whether another person should live or die. This kind of case I find rather boring, probably because the other people I would not care [about this: The Button (The Box spoof) ]. This is the back story quite nice and Amanda gets more depth. Furthermore, another important character is introduced. Nevertheless, imo, the first low point of the SAW series.
2.5 / 5
SAW IV - We meet two old friends again - rig which is placed by Jigsaw to promote to various people in Jigsaw traps so he can reach Eric Matthews. From that part is quite complicated in the series, but this is a fairly good twist and a hammer final. Furthermore, it is so successful the "second trilogy" and started a new cycle, for SAW IV to know the reason, many parallels to the first part.
4 / 5
SAW V - This time again have several people work together to escape from the traps (again parallel to the second part of the "first trilogy). One such person is the wonderful Julie Benz. Otherwise the story is more in focus so we get to Jigsaw's ex-wife Jill to know and learn more about Hoffman. Incidentally, the last scene is imo one of the best ends of the series.
3.5 / 5
SAW VI - The end of the second Trilogy thus conscience are once again falling on the plan, as I said I do not like them. However, they are better than their predecessors from SAW III. Otherwise, again expanded the story and we learn even more about Jill and Hoffman. There are (at least not within the SAW series within the movie), a right stuck surprising end and a reunion with Bear Trap in the case of Amanda in SAW I. Basically a good introduction to SAW VII, which is to bear the name and Endgame [again] to be the last part of the saga of Jigsaw. can if you are into the series they certainly pack on it anywhere, 0.5 points:
3 / 5
SAW conclusion. As for me when second run of the series has inspired especially the inner logic and the like end of the second trilogy, which is itself a bit more tributes. Basically reach into every part of more and more Sprockets logically into one another. I am fascinated by the series and they believe that the best horror series that did so far and am looking forward to any further part.
Resident Evil - Well with a few names / Licker name and the film actually has nothing to do with little Resident Evil. Here, the Licker is animated in the rest terrible. Otherwise, no voltage produced, still tells a good story and it just does not end satisfactorily. The film could also be called virus-XY. Well at least with Milla Jovovich a great dress.
fifth
Residen Evil: Apocalypse - Significantly higher Resi-feeling, but also generally much more entertaining. Jill Valentine and Nemesis was pretty good reception is great. There is also much more action than the first part, but also partly to excessive action scenes, but this is due to strange forces. Nevertheless, one would have the whole thing a bit less partying can. Overall a very entertaining movie which you look at quite can.
3 / 5
Resident Evil: Extinction - desert setting, birds, miscast and a terrible haircut to my mind spontaneously when I think back. The Resi-feeling is screwed down again for basically as in the first part only have names and have nothing to do with zombies Resident Evil. Even though I like them, but Ali Larter as Claire Redfield is an absolute wrong choice. Milla looks terrible and the plot is fairly unimportant to scarce.
1.5 / 5
Resident Evil-The Bottom Line: The second one can look at .. even as a Resident Evil fan, the other two are more of an insult to the name. What I really find the lack of reference to the games notice is negative, the very bumpy transition from film to film. They seem as if you had really no idea yet what happens in the next part.
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